A Tidal Wave

Posted on October 27, 2020 by Karima Hoisan

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A Tidal Wave

Your words shook up reality;
the rug pulled out from under me;
The sky cracked open suddenly,
leaving rivulets of salted rain,
running down my cheeks,
heralding, the cataclysmic start.

Then… a shredding and a ripping,
a tumbling and a triggering
a tearing, and a crackling,
a digging and a breaking
an awful cosmic shaking…
as it all began to fall apart

All was blown to pieces
over head and deep inside,
the thunder shook the beams
while an earthquake shook the seams.
betrayal was a word I heard
in denial and disbelief; it can not be
that this is your work of art!

Your love poem, now on the floor
the one I had so waited for,
the one I watched you write
then learned ’twas not for me
not for me, but written for another
not about anything we lived or loved…
and then, at the very end…
A tidal wave!

Karima Hoisan
October 27, 2020
Costa Rica

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32 Responses to A Tidal Wave

  1. Soni Cool😎 says:
    October 27, 2020 at 1:29 pm

    Superb dear👏🏻👏🏻❤️

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  2. quotidian2911 says:
    October 27, 2020 at 1:37 pm

    Awesome usage of the words cosmic shaking..

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  3. Karima Hoisan says:
    October 27, 2020 at 1:57 pm

    Thank you Soni…yes not happening now..but of course…I’ve been there:) as quotidiana says so correctly:) 🌺

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  4. daleinnis says:
    October 27, 2020 at 2:55 pm

    Haha, different indeed! I can’t quite decide if you’re expressing the emotion, or satirizing it. 🙂 What a wonderfully unique take!

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  5. Sabiscuit says:
    October 27, 2020 at 3:33 pm

    I like the house on the cliff. Like so many of us at the start of a new romance. We believe what we want to be true. It is hopeful but its optimism is tempting fate.

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  7. Jeff Flesch says:
    October 27, 2020 at 9:43 pm

    Excellently written, Karima. Beautiful. 🙂

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  8. Hoyt says:
    October 28, 2020 at 6:37 am

    I love the onomatopoeic quality of this Karima. It sounded dire. I’m happy to find out you were simply experimenting with words as you are so expertly adept at.

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    • Karima Hoisan says:
      October 28, 2020 at 9:17 am

      Thank you Hoyt, glad you enjoyed my change of style..Luckily, this is not about now…but I do have a long memory:) It means a lot that you enjoyed it.. Thank you my loyal friend/fan/ruco:)

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  9. Katy Claire says:
    October 28, 2020 at 11:46 pm

    Karima, this is heartbreakingly stunning ♥️💔 Such evocative writing. I felt I was right there 🌊 I especially love that first stanza with the “rivulets of salted rain” and “cataclysmic start.”

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  10. Diana says:
    October 29, 2020 at 2:41 am

    Beautifully penned❤️💐

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  11. Karima Hoisan says:
    October 29, 2020 at 12:05 pm

    and also with you Diana:):)🌹

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  12. Samreen Asad says:
    November 7, 2020 at 5:39 pm

    Beautiful yet so deep and heartbreaking at the end ❤️

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  13. Karima Hoisan says:
    November 7, 2020 at 5:48 pm

    Exactly.. and Allah alam what is best for us:) and we are thankful for everything that comes….🙏🌺🌸 💐

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  14. annefoley1 says:
    November 12, 2020 at 12:17 pm

    This is so well-written and beautiful! Thank you Karima. I love reading your work! It’s so powerful.

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  15. Benjamin Grossman says:
    December 20, 2020 at 7:25 am

    Just awesome. Powerful throughout. Fantastic ending stanza!

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  16. Karima Hoisan says:
    December 20, 2020 at 8:33 am

    Oh and I just ventured into yours and already liked what I saw Benjamin!….I will visit again soon too:):)

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