“Dawn Light” by Dale Innis on ChatGPT AI Art
Click Play to hear me recite the poem to my music that inspired it:)
My Future Pain
It’s a humid balmy dawn after that last late night rain…
the vapor rises from the garden; it’s so late, it’s way past dawn.
Tropical but mystical..it really does walk hand in hand,
like you and I in the growing light,
tropical but mystical, the dew on the grass bathes our toes.
My hand slides up and down your skin, so smooth your marble arms
unconsciously; there’s crazy changes in my heart.
Walk with me, you are the beauty, you are my future pain.
I saw you in the past and now you’re here, but soon you will be gone.
Through all of this, the insects keeping rhythm with their feet…
this entire scene, will trill away, like a dream once dreamed.
You proved to me when all the elements are in place,
they can cause an event that will rock a world and bring it down
Before today, it was just a theory; now it’s way too late to deny.
The insects trill, my heart almost stops when I see you smile.
But no, this is not the ending.. I do not accept we are being ripped apart
and I will shout it to the last star, dying on the morning sky,
“No, this is not the ending!” I do not accept we are being ripped apart.
My heart knows the truth I’m going to lose you, one of these dawns.
You will kiss me goodbye and promise to call and disappear into the mist…
like the waning night sky being eaten by the encroaching day.
I know I have this in store; it’s something that I’m waiting for.
I can see the future and in it…I stand alone.
Karima Hoisan
May 1st 2024
Costa Rica
*Footnote: I admit I am quite proud of this musical piece:) It came together in a very singular way, and as always, I feel I have very little to do with its making..although, of course I do:)
Someone asked me for the instrumental version of this piece and I am happy to share it:) You can download or stream it here https://filedn.com/l7Df4R6F1DTBv0B99l7YP6L/Unacceptable.mp3
The original music was entitled “Unacceptable”:)
After struggling to learn the new version of Garage Band (after being on the older versions, the last 13 years) I am feeling like WOW..I am beginning to know what I am doing:)
I told Dale I feel like “Whistler’s Mother of Garage Band ” haha.
So I hope you enjoyed it and the poem was written to the music (On a loop of course) to try and get the right, sensual bittersweet/darkish-lightish mood:)
Digital Rabbit Hole 
Beautiful and powerful🔥🔥🔥😊
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Thank you so much.. I appreciate you listening and leaving this positive comment.
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So you’re a singer-songwriter now, woot!
This really puts me in the mood to dance. 🙂
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Hehe not too much a singer but composing seems to be my new addiction along with poetry:) Yes has a great beat and some interesting changes:) Glad you enjoyed it Joey:)
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This is both great poetry (as usual) and I absolutely love the music. It conjures that humid dawn that you mention to a tee. It kept bubbling up in a way I really enjoyed!
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Thank you Oing…Getting a music shout out from you is a big deal for me. I know how imposrtant music is to you plus we share much of the same taste in it:):) Yes..it has it’s interesting shifts but always with a strong beat:) So glad Oing you loved it !! You made my day:)
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This is true art, Karima. I find it utterly delightful.
~David
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Wow Wow David!! Thank you for saying this… I am honored you see it in this way. 🌹
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the poem & music are perfect, & i love them💞 i know that feeling you speak about at the end. it visits me sometimes too.
with some things, dispassion is like a bandaid on a gut wound, but better than nothing at all. what a creative way to deal with weltschmertz: this poem & the music😘thank you, soulkin, for sharing this creative gem❤️🌹❤️
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Ahhh my pleasure soulkin…we both have lived long enough to probably have lived this too, in its variations and intensities. The music came first and the only way I could write a poem to it to recite with it was to loop it and see what came…Interesting this is what came…a bit of an old memory in a new way:):) I was thinking of just putting the music out there on it’s own as an instrumental version…and actually I think I will:):) Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback too..See you Saturday…inshallah:)
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Beautiful music and amazing dance of words. Thank you dear Karima for sharing your verbal poetry. I do enjoy.
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Thank you John for coming to visit and for taking the time to listen to the total package:) That means a lot to me 🤗
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I always do friend. I enjoy your words and thoughts. You are welcome dear Karima..
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Yayy you are back Karima ❤️🌹❤️
You know I love your spoken word!
This is so beautiful my friend 🤗
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Awww thank you for the warm welcome back Maggie. My muse returned with desires to compose music….As always, I let her get away, like an overindulged child, so I have been doing that since my return…I love it too.’Glad you approve of the results too:) 🤗❤️🌹
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My pleasure Karima 🌹❤️
It is so lovely to have you back and of course when our muse speaks we must pay attention🤗
You are so creative and everything comes together perfectly 🤗
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true dreamy art … that is a great tune, kudos!
Enjoy your love while it lasts, all things are temporary 🙂
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Aww thank you Kate for your kind words on my music. Don’t worry about me Kate…I am 77 years old and write much from my memory…This was a long long time ago…:)
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lol so nice to recall the love of your life, had me sucked in!
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The music and storyline are perfectly choreographed. Amazing how you do that! It’s like you’re the Volcano and these delightful productions are the Lava boiling and bubbling until they EXPLODE, spill over (out of your head, lol) and flow downhill upon release to ‘us’ (smiles). I love your emotional authenticity and how you’ve extended beyond the cool imagery that Dale creates along with the comfort of your voice by including these amazing tracks! Seems there’s no end to your talent, especially because you keep tackling the hard skills until you harness their power and then mix everything with your passionate interests. Well done, Sissy-Poo ((hugs))
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Awww Sis…you wanna be my manager? Haha I am a difficult client probably because I just give it all away and share it:) You won’t get rich off me, but how much is a night of laughter, tears rolling down our faces in 3rd degree laughing hyteria worth hmmm? Priceless Sissy Poo, like your fabulous, funny and totally inspirational comments..you’ve been tossing my way for…quite awhile now. I have to rethink the outer space project, but maybe a nice birdwatching tour on Kepler could produce some fine scenes..We need to brainstorm one of these days…Let’s reign our South African Sissy too:):) Love you Sis…loved this comment too🤗
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Wonderful touching verse, and just the music for it… and just the voice for it!
“you are my future pain“
What an amazing line. Thank you, as always!
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Thanks so much Dale and for the image that I think captures the mood well too. Aww you made me blush, but really, I’m happy you liked the whole “tamale” Yes your love of that line, turned it into the title. Thanks for letting me run it by you in all its different stages of conception too:)
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You’re a multi talented person, Karima! Love the way you compose and present your music and verses.👏💐💖🙏
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Thank you so much Kaushal for enjoying my “thing” of spoken word pieces to music and lately I am becoming more confident, producing my own music. Your support is very valued by me. 🙏
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You’re more than welcome!
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This was so beautiful and such a heartbreaking yet raw ending ❤️
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Awww thank you Pooja for immersing in this piece and really feeling it.
I’m glad you found beauty as well as heartbreak inside. 🤗
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You’re so welcome 🤗
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Sin lugar a dudas has encontrado las palabras correctas para despedirte de una relación significativa. Con un tono melancólico, muestras el desgarro de aceptar la pérdida y asumir que ya no podrán disfrutar de esa compañía. Una delicia de poema Karima. Buen fin de semana.
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Muchas gracias Manuel y qué gusto de verte aqui en mi página!!
Te agradezco tu comentario y veo que entendiste el tema totalmente.
Espero que te gustó también la música que realmente hizo a nacer el poema. Disfruta tu fin de semana tambien y mil gracias por expresar muy bellamente tus pensamientos.
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Por supuesto que me gustó la canción. Muy buena en música y letra. Tú sabes que tu blog tiene ese atractivo poético para seguirte. Estuve en una pausa larga pero me estoy poniendo al día con tus poemas. Un abrazo grande y cariñoso.
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Yo tambie´n tomé un tiempo pero estoy regresando creando y leyendo a mis favoritos…te incluyo, por supesto Manuel, en este categoría:)
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Oh! Que halago. Gracias Karima
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Another lovely piece to listen to. You have a great voice for these words.
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David, thank you so much for taking the time to listen. This poem, born from the music, I think is best listened not just read. I appreciate your words that my voice is good for these kinds of readings. It means a lot.
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First my dear dear beloved friend, Dale did an amazing job as always setting the scene it is breath-taking. On the woman’s dress on the left you can actually see what seems to be the light catching sewn on pearls illuminating. Just gorgeous work Dale.
Karima, this music is so very good, I absolutely love it and the beat is so perfect for this gorgeous piece of writing. There are many lines that catch my breath as I envision you walking perhaps with yourself, when you were a very young woman. Metaphorically that is how I see this piece but of course I have not idea for sure, except that it is so beautiful and your spoken word is gorgeous.
My favorite stanza is actually the last. These words are the perfect ending which by the way I love the way you did this with your spoken word. So talented you are my friend. Just love your work. As you know I am taking a 5 day break after all the work from a book launch but I could just not wait until it was over to take a look at this. Thank you for letting me know about it too. Also how did you get that good on the new release of garage band – very impressive also Karima.
“My heart knows the truth I’m going to lose you, one of these dawns.
You will kiss me goodbye and promise to call and disappear into the mist…
like the waning night sky being eaten by the encroaching day.
I know I have this in store; it’s something that I’m waiting for.
I can see the future and in it…I stand alone.“ BRAVO - sending you big hugs, love and kisses! Joni
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Joni thank you so much for listening to this and leaving me (as always) your beautiful and detailed comment. You are so perceptive with small details, which is something you show in your poetry that I love and I love your astute observations when you comment on something of mine too.
This poem was born from the music and the details about how this musical piece came together, still feel like a magic act, and we can talk about it more when we talk again.
As you know my eternal muse will always be Umahmad….she is my own iconic real life figure of an example of platonic romance, that I know can exist, because I had it with her:)
She never got to walk the tropical gardens with me, sadly, but that is the poetic license we can take when we create. I too, and I say this humbly with little ownership of this piece (felt like automatic composing/writing) that it is one of my favorites and you’re right, others seem to vibrate to it too. You know about those special poems…*smiles, I had the honor of recording one of yours:)
Love you Joni…and I appreciate this so much…I know how overwhelmed you have been with the launch of your book…thank you for your visit and for leaving me this gorgeous comment..
Talk tomorrow? 3pm?
Love,
Kari
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Just listen to this tune…and listen to your beautiful voice…and then listen to your lyrics…just sense the whole piece…wow, the effect is so powerful…amazing poetry with beautiful music…and the depth of your words has reached the new depth coz of your expressive voice, my dear friend…wow, you’re a soul full of creativity…soulful you are, beautiful being 🔥✨❤️💫
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Wow Naveen oh my listen to your comment!!! You make me feel how much your enjoyed this coming together of everything . I feel very little ownership over the final piece… it just seems it wanted to be born … and so it was… almost without me doing much of anything.. this is so hard to explain but I know you have felt it too, when everything just falls together on its own. It really feels like that. Thank you dear Navin for your beautiful and very inspiring comment. I am blown away ❤️🙏🤗🌹🥰
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It’s my pleasure, Karima…I love this piece…Infact, I’ve just listened to it once again & I couldn’t stop me from commenting…once again…from the space, I’m sitting in 😊
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Wow what a dreamy and wonderful piece, Karima. I could fee you dreaming him into existence of this relished sould and the music is spectacular!! Thank you for your vision and sharing this gem with your amazing work of art in words. You are the master garage band extrodinaire. 🙌🏽🍓♬🌹
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Cindy!!! Welcome back again:)..always such a treat for me to read one of your comments. This piece, how it came together, like automatic composing, was a very rare occurence for me personally…and of course took all feelings of ownership of it away…I could just enjoy it as a bystander and in this mood, I wrote the poem. That’s my how-I-did-it story but thank you so much for your wonderful words..Lol I see myself with a Garage Band stauette in my hand…grease colored, a figure standing with a tire iron in one hand and the other perched a top a truck tire. I would give a great 15 second speech, until they dragged me off into the wings. Really, thank you one more time, for believing in me and what I do:):) ❤️🙏🤗
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Awww thanks and you’re so more than welcome. hahahah I love this visual, Karima “I see myself with a Garage Band stauette in my hand…grease colored, a figure standing with a tire iron in one hand and the other perched a top a truck tire. I would give a great 15 second speech, until they dragged me off into the wings.” I’ll stand with you and Love your radiance and love of all you do and joy and vibrancy in which you do it💓♬🙌🏽
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Cindy…Oh you definitely are going to be my plus 1 at the Garage Band Awards!! I could not imagine anyone else by my side..Remember there is a dresscode..overalls are great or cargo pants will do too.Get creative:).I’ll pick you up at 8 sharp!!
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Very beautiful!
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Thank you Dawn, I’m a little proud of the music on this one…it came so effortlessly:)
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Karima, what a beautiful person & an amazing artist you are…you’ve just published a song…the catchy music, the deep lyrics (this poem), your beautiful voice…plus Dale’s cool images…”But no, this is not the ending.. I do not accept we are being ripped apart”…this poem carries such a feeling that it needs to be felt…I think, I know this feeling…n then you raised the bar up through this song…you’re so creative…I love the way you’ve expressed those feelings ❤️
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Thank you my dearest friend, your comment about this poem touched me deeply. I guess you’re right, it is like a song and believe me, it was never my plan, it just came out that way.Thank you for your positive reaction to this one…Oh Navin, all you have said, touches me deeply. I am more than blessed to call you my friend, my fellow poet and Garage Band composer…Thank you for being in my life. 🙏❤️
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🙏✨❤️🤗💫
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Beautiful! Very good descriptions. 😊
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Thank you for your sweet comment..I am sorry I just saw it today..
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Ah, the combination of words and rhythm are mesmerizing. Thank you for sharing this, Karima.
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Thank you so much for coming here and I am very happy you like how they combined together so well.. Thank you for listening..
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