You Snored Like A Bird

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                                                    Painting by Evelyn Hamilton

You Snored Like a Bird

I never believed people like you existed:
When you hovered off the ground instead of walking…
When you laughed, I heard wind chimes tinkling
around the corners of your eyes,
When we laughed so hard, I honestly thought I would die.
Is great humor not the sexiest thing besides…?
…besides silk and velour, leather, sandalwood and an attitude?
How many times did we laugh until we kissed?
How many times did I pinch myself, to make sure
I was not dreaming?
When we spent our first night together…
You snored..but you snored like a bird;
you snored in notes, and down feathers,
Springtime and indigo blue.
Your rhythm was perfect; you were pitch-perfect too.
Your hair fell over the pillowcase like a waterfall
Who were you really?
Even I was not that imaginative to have invented you.
I certainly was not worthy and yet you loved me.
How could I not love you?
How could I not fear that this could never last?
If I was wrong about everything else, my love
I was certainly right about that.
One day, you woke up, glided out the gate
down the middle of the path and that was that.
All the magic you suspended over us,
all the uncanny, the wondrous
fell like heavy air…everywhere.
I still have never found another soul,
to laugh with me and hypnotize the room,
to beguile and bewitch and kiss my lips
and who snored with me in harmony.

Karima Hoisan
June 26, 2021
Costa Rica

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39 Responses to You Snored Like A Bird

  1. daleinnis says:

    A beautiful happy sad love poem. May we all feel so deeply!

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  2. Jeff Flesch says:

    Beautifully crafted and delivered to us all, Karima. So much love, wonder, and passion in your verse. This is so gorgeous,

    “I still have never found another soul,
    to laugh with me and hypnotize the room,
    to beguile and bewitch and kiss my lips
    and who snored with me in harmony.”

    Beautiful, beautiful, my dear friend. 🙏❤🤗🌷✨

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    • Thank you fellow poet and friend, for your beautiful comment.. Ironically, I think I was just reviewing your latest too in perfect synchronicity. The truth is some souls are so unique, it’s hard, rather impossible to find another. There is always that tendency to look, but, it’s a futile journey.🤗❤️🌹🔆

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      • Jeff Flesch says:

        And, there it is, synchronicity indeed. Lovely. Ah, yes, I completely understand, dear Karima. You’re most welcome, my friend. Always! ❤️🤗🌺😆

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  3. If I was wrong about everything else, my love
    I was certainly right about that.

    This is – indescribably beautiful and powerful. I’m so sorry, Karima… but, oh… what a gorgeous tribute.

    💔
    David

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  4. Ace says:

    Wow Karima, this is just so deeply beautiful. The ebbs and flows of emotion are palpable and so perfectly described. You took my heart on a ride, and I could feel each word so vividly. The flow is so nostalgic, tender and dreamy…YOU are truly an amazing writer. And that ending is so special and precious, it really ties the whole piece together 🖤🖤

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    • Dear Ace, thank you so much for your comment. It makes me feel really happy to know, you found my words beautiful..I was a bit unsure about posting it..and now I am glad I did:) Thank you talented poet..you not only write with depth..you see with depth. Thank you for your generosity, to take the time out, to really read my poem …let it “take you for a ride” and leave this beautiful, thoughtful comment habeebity❤️🤗🙏🌹✨🌺🌟

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  5. Sad yet so beautiful Karima!

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  6. KK says:

    Snoring in harmony! The depth and passion throughout the poem appears to be your trademark, Karima! I loved the way you wrote this poignant piece on love. It deeply touches the heart. It’s so powerful, yet beautiful 👍😊💐

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  7. Samreen Asad says:

    Yet another powerful love-filled beautiful piece, habeebity ❤️ some people are like that UmJulian, they are like birds, spread colors all around and silently they fly away. May be here, they were caged. 😊 Lovely❤️❤️❤️🤗🤗🤗

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    • Hugs habeebity! You know who this one is for..My real life soap opera, I will never write out..just hint at from time to time in poetry. i would say she was the freest of birds until her own illness caged her in..How sad, but true. But yes, in her day she spread color all around and I can still dip my word brush in them..and paint a memory.. Love you Habeebity…Thank you for you loving and supportive friendship. Jazak Allah UmAnzar❤️🤗❤️🤗🔆

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  8. Diana says:

    Such poignant and deep lines, Karima. Sometimes, I read your words and I am transported to another time and place. And I love being there! I know who you wrote this for too… as you have told me about her before. It is really beautiful. I am so glad I started this blog….or I would have never found such a beautiful soul such as yours! Stay blessed Habibti! 🌹❤😘🥰

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    • Perdon perdon..your wonderful comment escaped me. Aww thank you for saying that..I am flying with your beautiful words. I am so glad we made our connection here on WordPress too.otherwise I would never have had the pleasure of meeting such an outstanding, original poet and such a supportive poetic friend.. BIG BIG HUGS habeebity..
      🤗🤗🤗❤️🙏🌹🌺🌟🌸

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  9. So much perfection in this piece! The title instantly caught me as one of my favorites. And this whole part just rises so high:

    “When we spent our first night together…
    You snored..but you snored like a bird;
    you snored in notes, and down feathers,
    Springtime and indigo blue.
    Your rhythm was perfect; you were pitch-perfect too.
    Your hair fell over the pillowcase like a waterfall
    Who were you really?”

    Very outstanding. I’m so impressed!

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    • Awww Ben, I apologize for missing this comment too..Wow you leave me impressed with these uplifting words. I love that you loved that part..personally, it was one of my favorites too when I really felt right in the middle of the magic of writing it …I know you know what I mean..I didn’t even have to pause to take a breath…ahh if all poems would come that smoothly!!! Thank you again..and yes the title…just summed it up I think..So glad it sucked you in:) 🤗❤️🙏🌹🌟

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      • Yes, this was so fantastic from start to finish. That title really just grabbed my attention. It was so unique. Oh that’s the best when you create in one smooth flow. You’re welcome 🙂 ❤️

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  10. Thanks again Ben for another great comment!!🙏❤️

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  11. jonicaggiano says:

    This is a deliciously sweet description of sleeping with someone you love.
    I read your piece on MasticadoresUSA and loved it. Nice to meet you and to read your lovely work.
    ❤️🤗Joni

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  12. Thank you so much for your encouragement Aami:) 🤗❤️🙏

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  13. That painting by Evelyn Hamilton is simply beautiful. The girl in the painting looks almost trapped behind the strokes of the brush. And as for your words… they were simply captivating. I think I can understand the feeling of when you love someone believing that every little thing they say or do sounds beautiful and feels like heaven. And the indescribable hurt when they leave can feel almost impossible to bear.

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    • Thank you so much Simone for this comment, full of insight and sensitivity. Yes, I feel you
      entered into my feelings and what I was trying to say. I love your comments because you are very intuitive and express yourself so well. So nice to know you enjoyed this poem on the deepest levels…🙏🌹🤗❤️🦋

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  14. da-AL says:

    clever & profound – many tx for sharing

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