A Tidal Wave
Your words shook up reality;
the rug pulled out from under me;
The sky cracked open suddenly,
leaving rivulets of salted rain,
running down my cheeks,
heralding, the cataclysmic start.
Then… a shredding and a ripping,
a tumbling and a triggering
a tearing, and a crackling,
a digging and a breaking
an awful cosmic shaking…
as it all began to fall apart
All was blown to pieces
over head and deep inside,
the thunder shook the beams
while an earthquake shook the seams.
betrayal was a word I heard
in denial and disbelief; it can not be
that this is your work of art!
Your love poem, now on the floor
the one I had so waited for,
the one I watched you write
then learned ’twas not for me
not for me, but written for another
not about anything we lived or loved…
and then, at the very end…
A tidal wave!
Karima Hoisan
October 27, 2020
Costa Rica
Superb dear👏🏻👏🏻❤️
Thank you Soni for your reply..This is sort of a different style for me, I was just having fun:):) Happy to say, not based on anything in my life at the moment:):) 🌹🙏❤️
Thank god… Happy that you tried different style… And really well written…😀👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻❤️🤗
Awesome usage of the words cosmic shaking..
Thank you quotidiana:) Things like that..can feel like the apocalypse when it happens to you:) Thanks so much for commenting!
So true!! Happens to everyone at some point or the other..
Thank you Soni…yes not happening now..but of course…I’ve been there:) as quotidiana says so correctly:) 🌺
Haha, different indeed! I can’t quite decide if you’re expressing the emotion, or satirizing it. 🙂 What a wonderfully unique take!
Smiles..when I look closely, my face has a little wink in one eye.. but seriously..this does happen:( and it feels cosmeically awful! Thank you Dale for feedback:)
I like the house on the cliff. Like so many of us at the start of a new romance. We believe what we want to be true. It is hopeful but its optimism is tempting fate.
So very true! and perhaps at anytime….the wave rolls in and destroys everything! Thank you for your comment Lily:) 🙏❤️
Nice one
Thank you so much for leaving your comment, Sang!!
Excellently written, Karima. Beautiful. 🙂
Thank you so much Jeff, for enjoying it and for being so supportive to me:)
I love the onomatopoeic quality of this Karima. It sounded dire. I’m happy to find out you were simply experimenting with words as you are so expertly adept at.
Thank you Hoyt, glad you enjoyed my change of style..Luckily, this is not about now…but I do have a long memory:) It means a lot that you enjoyed it.. Thank you my loyal friend/fan/ruco:)
Karima, this is heartbreakingly stunning ♥️💔 Such evocative writing. I felt I was right there 🌊 I especially love that first stanza with the “rivulets of salted rain” and “cataclysmic start.”
Beautifully penned❤️💐
Thank you so much Diana..I too am enjoying your poetry:)🌺
Aww… Thank you Karima. So glad to connect with you💐❤️😊
and also with you Diana:):)🌹
Beautiful yet so deep and heartbreaking at the end ❤️
Life sends us tidal waves sometimes..when we least expect it.. Thank you habeebity for feeling my poetry!
Yes my dear and that is what life is all about. It leaves you awestruck many a times when you are busy making your own plans. 😊
Exactly.. and Allah alam what is best for us:) and we are thankful for everything that comes….🙏🌺🌸 💐
This is so well-written and beautiful! Thank you Karima. I love reading your work! It’s so powerful.
Thank you so much for leaving this beautiful comment..`it makes me so happy you are enjoying my poetry.. ❤️
Just awesome. Powerful throughout. Fantastic ending stanza!
Thank you Benjamin for your comment..I am very pleased you did, and that you enjoyed what I tried to express in this one. Welcome to my blog!
You’re welcome. I can tell there will be lots to explore here. Looking forward to diving in and reading more soon. Have a great rest of your day!
Oh and I just ventured into yours and already liked what I saw Benjamin!….I will visit again soon too:):)