A Tidal Wave

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A Tidal Wave

Your words shook up reality;
the rug pulled out from under me;
The sky cracked open suddenly,
leaving rivulets of salted rain,
running down my cheeks,
heralding, the cataclysmic start.

Then… a shredding and a ripping,
a tumbling and a triggering
a tearing, and a crackling,
a digging and a breaking
an awful cosmic shaking…
as it all began to fall apart

All was blown to pieces
over head and deep inside,
the thunder shook the beams
while an earthquake shook the seams.
betrayal was a word I heard
in denial and disbelief; it can not be
that this is your work of art!

Your love poem, now on the floor
the one I had so waited for,
the one I watched you write
then learned ’twas not for me
not for me, but written for another
not about anything we lived or loved…
and then, at the very end…
A tidal wave!

Karima Hoisan
October 27, 2020
Costa Rica

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28 Responses to A Tidal Wave

  1. Superb dear👏🏻👏🏻❤️

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  2. Awesome usage of the words cosmic shaking..

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  3. Thank you Soni…yes not happening now..but of course…I’ve been there:) as quotidiana says so correctly:) 🌺

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  4. daleinnis says:

    Haha, different indeed! I can’t quite decide if you’re expressing the emotion, or satirizing it. 🙂 What a wonderfully unique take!

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  5. Sabiscuit says:

    I like the house on the cliff. Like so many of us at the start of a new romance. We believe what we want to be true. It is hopeful but its optimism is tempting fate.

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  6. Jeff Flesch says:

    Excellently written, Karima. Beautiful. 🙂

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  7. Hoyt says:

    I love the onomatopoeic quality of this Karima. It sounded dire. I’m happy to find out you were simply experimenting with words as you are so expertly adept at.

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    • Thank you Hoyt, glad you enjoyed my change of style..Luckily, this is not about now…but I do have a long memory:) It means a lot that you enjoyed it.. Thank you my loyal friend/fan/ruco:)

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  8. Katy Claire says:

    Karima, this is heartbreakingly stunning ♥️💔 Such evocative writing. I felt I was right there 🌊 I especially love that first stanza with the “rivulets of salted rain” and “cataclysmic start.”

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  9. Diana says:

    Beautifully penned❤️💐

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  10. and also with you Diana:):)🌹

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  11. Samreen Asad says:

    Beautiful yet so deep and heartbreaking at the end ❤️

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  12. Exactly.. and Allah alam what is best for us:) and we are thankful for everything that comes….🙏🌺🌸 💐

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  13. annefoley1 says:

    This is so well-written and beautiful! Thank you Karima. I love reading your work! It’s so powerful.

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